支招小作文(180) I 靜態表 五個國家女性職員&管理者的比例

April 11, 2024

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[2024/ 4/ 7] The table below shows the percentage of women in workforce and management in five countries in 2022.

【主體段分段】：

方法1：按照 <豎列比較對象> 分段（workforce一段，management一段）

方法2：按照 <左右差距> 分段（本篇文章採取此種分段方法）

【開頭段】

The table compares the proportions of females working in the workforce and at managerial level in Australia, Egypt, Siri Lanka, Japan and United States for the year 2002.

【概述段】

It is clear thatonly in Australia and US, almost equal numbers of women worked as ordinary professionals and managers.In the rest three countries, there were more females engaged in workforce than those taking managerial roles.

思路要點：

- Australia和US：workforce和management的比例相似

- 剩下三個國家：workforce>management

【Body 1】

Looking at the information in more detail, we can see thatthe gapbetween these two groups of people was not obvious in Australia and United States.In the former country, female managersslightly outnumberedfemale workers, with the difference of only 1%.By contrast, a different pattern could be seen inUS, with 46% of women working in the workforce and 43% in management field.

思路要點：Australia + United States（左右兩邊差距小）

- Australia：management輕微>workforce，差距爲1%

- 相反，United States：workforce輕微>management,分別佔比46%和43%

【Body 2】

A larger gap between these two occupations could be found inthe rest three countries.This is especially true forSiri Lanka, where the proportion of female workers was 41%,almost 5 times as large as the figure forthose who occupied managerial positions.Likewise,only 17% of Japanese women worked in managerial level,while48% were employed in the workforce.Besides, there were12% of female managers in Egypt, and this figurewas nearly half ofthe figure for those working in the workforce.

思路要點：剩餘3個國家

- 左右兩邊差較大

- Siri Lanka：workforce是41%，幾乎是management的5倍

- Japan：workforce→只有17%，但是management→48%

- Egypt：management→12%，大約是workforce的一半